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KARKAT: IT ENDS HERE?

KARKAT: WHAT HAPPENS AFTER VRISKA ENTERS THE POINT?

CALLIOPE: well... i don't actUally know!

CALLIOPE: the visions Used to come so easily, bUt for whatever reason, past this point i keep drawing blanks!

CALLIOPE: feels like the ol' well dried Up, and i thoUght to myself, "well, who better to approach for advice than a trUe connoisseUr of narrative arts?"

KARKAT: WELL.

KARKAT: I'M GLAD YOU APPRECIATE THAT.

KARKAT: I DEFINITELY HAVE A LOT OF CRITIQUES, IF THAT'S WHAT YOU'RE ASKING FOR.

CALLIOPE: well, i'm open to hearing them!

CALLIOPE: trUth be told, i don't really plan on changing anything that i've already written, bUt it's jUst nice to have someone else pUt eyes on this for a change!

CALLIOPE: so...

CALLIOPE: what *did* yoU think of it? ^u^

KARKAT: WHEW, OKAY, WHERE DO I START.

KARKAT: THE FORMATTING, FOR ONE.

KARKAT: ARE YOU STILL DOING CHAPTERS? IT FEELS LIKE THE LAST CHAPTER JUST... KEEPS GOING.

KARKAT: NOT TO MENTION ALL THE CHAPTERS YOU STRAIGHT UP SKIPPED.

CALLIOPE: ah!

CALLIOPE: i'm actUally pretty sUre that i'm going to abandon the chapter format.

CALLIOPE: i think of everything past the point of dave's apotheosis-

KARKAT: HIS OBAMA-INSPIRED SUICIDE?

CALLIOPE: well, that's a redUctive way of pUtting it, bUt yes, that-

CALLIOPE: everything past that point seems to me to work more as the first act of a follow-Up saga!

CALLIOPE: which i only really realized a good way into the Undertaking, hehe.

CALLIOPE: bUt i was hoping more for notes on content!

KARKAT: WELL YOU DEFINITELY TOOK OUR FRIEND GROUP IN AN INTERESTING DIRECTION.

KARKAT: EVEN IF YOU SKIPPED HUGE CHUNKS OF CONTEXT.

KARKAT: IT'S HORRIFYING AND DEPRESSING AND KIND OF SADISTIC?

KARKAT: YOU'VE GOT YOUR WRIGGLERS EMBIGGENMENT SCOPE TOWERING OVER OUR SHITTY LITTLE NEST, BURNING US ALL ALIVE AS YOU WATCH PERVERSELY.

KARKAT: BUT ALSO IT DEMONSTRATES A WEIRDLY APT UNDERSTANDING OF THE SHIT A LOT OF US HAVE GOT GOING ON.

KARKAT: WHICH IS ODD, BECAUSE I FEEL LIKE ALMOST NOBODY EVER ACTUALLY TALKS TO YOU?

KARKAT: MY BIGGEST CRITIQUE IS THAT IF ANYONE BESIDE US READ THIS, THEY WOULDN'T KNOW WHAT THE FUCK WAS GOING ON.

KARKAT: WAS THAT YOUR INTENTION?